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Every fool in the game knows the rules of the fight
Put them up, do your best or go hungry tonight.

Take some hits, throw a punch, do as best as you're able
Win this bout and go home with some food on the table.

From the day I left school to the day I drop dead
I've broken every bone just to earn my bread.

It hurts to starve but when push comes to shove
Nothing hurts worse than the hunger for love.

Every day, my heart hurts
And by night, it gets worse

I remember the day you gave me your smile
And for once, life feels right, if only for a while.

My opponent's blow puts me back in my place,
It's my own fault, dreaming of your face.

The ring has no patience for dreamers and fools,
But you'll save your skin if you play by the rules

Keep my head in the game, the fight is not done
The bell's just gone off and it's time for round one!

I lie in bed dreaming, of getting my chance
Daring to dream of the truest romance. 

My hardest fight has yet to start,
But I'll know that I've won when I've won your heart. 



This is my entry to :iconbright-poets:'s Love Poetry contest, with the theme: "Fighting for Love"

I'm finding it harder and harder as time goes by to write romantic poetry and yet...virtually all my written work goes back to the same thing: love. 

No matter how many times I've been frustrated with the rug pulled out from under my feet, I can't stop writing about the same thing. I suppose the only thing that has changed is that my outlook to love is more shy and sheltered. :shrug:

The idea for this came as I was walking back to my residence one night. Mother Teresa once said: "The hunger for bread is easier satisfied than the hunger for love". I then thought of stories of nak muay (Muay Thai boxers) in Thailand who actually have to fight to put food on the table. If they don't win, they go hungry at night. 

From there, the rhymes just came to me and I started muttering them to myself. Good thing I had a notebook to jot them down at the time. I haven't written a completely rhyming poem in English for nearly 10 years and I'm still not sure how I did.

I'm really not sure about the title at all ^^;

Oh well, if nothing else, at least I gave it my best.

Enjoy the poem everyone. Happy Valentine's Day :heart: :rose:
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SueJOwen Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2015  Professional General Artist
It is one of those damn human needs we can't get rid of, ever.
This reads well and smoothly; I like it a lot.
As a picky being may I ask you to change one word for the sake of proper grammar?
In the 9th couplet please chance went to gone. It's a common error. Forgive me please.
My husband picked me up in a bar. I had a cold and was hiding in the corner. My friend had begged me to drive her.
Well, the saying I know is true is, "When you're not looking, love will find you."  I've been married forever.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh, I was wondering if that was right.

No, not at all! Thank you for pointing that out, every little helps. Especially with grammar. Fixing it!

That's beautiful :heart:
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SueJOwen Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2015  Professional General Artist
:) (Smile) 
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015
I think you did the rhyme just fine, and it was the title that drew me to read it, so I think you're golden there! I know what you mean, with every heartbreak, I get more jaded and more guarded, it's sad really.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:iconthankssomuchplz: That means a lot to me.

And yeah, it is. Sorry it happened to you, though
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2015
Always my pleasure.

*shrugs* It's just life... we move on, hopefully forward. Thanks though. Hug 
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014
"It hurts to starve but when push comes to shove
Nothing hurts worse than the hunger for love."

Love these lines. :heart:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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inknalcohol Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014   Writer
Reminds me of Simon and Garfunkel's The Boxer.

You've nailed the rhyme, but the beat gets lost sometimes.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's a good song, I'm happy to hear that :nod:

That's funny you should say because to be honest, this was more of a freak accident of rhyme than an exercise in rhythm. I didn't really have a beat in mind. I just made it up as I went along, really.
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inknalcohol Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014   Writer
Well then.  That's awesome.  Because you nailed the rhyme.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy to hear that! Next poetry goal, an exercise in rhythm!
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Leah084 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
I really enjoyed this :)
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy to hear that :thanks:
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Student Writer
Love couplets. :D
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I was lucky to come up with them
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome. :) Ah, I'm sure it was more skill than luck, especially if your gallery is anything to judge by. :D
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Once again, thank you :thanks:
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Student Writer
No worries. :)
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Liowayo Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I feel that ,in essence, this poem explains the hard work that people need to give in order to survive, to obtain the little things that fulfill their vital needs.  Of course, there is also love, but I like the first lines, I imagine someone running under the rain in a narrow and shadowy hallway.  Thanks for the images!
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! I thank you for your comments and your thoughts, as I find that to  be an interesting interpretation. :nod:
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i love this.  i think the idea behind it is incredible.  and, usually, i don't particularly like rhyme schemes (they are either done horribly or just don't work), but this one is good, and surprisingly, i enjoyed it.

you're a fantastic writer.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That means so much to me, I tell you. I'm not always confident when it comes to rhyming. It just doesn't come very easy to me. I'm happy you enjoyed it! 

Thank you! :heart:
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Graphix-Goddess Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Professional Writer

Aw wow.... I love this! I really love your ability to tell a story in vivid pictures. I read and see the whole thing playing out like a movie in clips and pictures. My heartstrings are tugged and I feel the emotion of it in gentle waves of each verse.

 

Very nicely done, Skander. Best of luck in the contest :clap: :fingerscrossed:. I really believe you have captured the theme perfectly in your words here. You really put your heart into this!

 

It was a lovely start to my day to read this piece from you.

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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Coming from you...it made my day to read your comment!

I'm so happy to have brightened your day in the process :love: :thanks:

As it happens, I actually got 2nd place! I'm really happy about it :heart:
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Graphix-Goddess Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Professional Writer
That's wonderful! Congrats!! :clap:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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