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Though I lived in one land for many years, I wandered very far
I walked alone in a world of my own making
And I secretly longed for someone to breach the walls of my desolate mind's fortress

While mere mortals may dream of conquest of every kind through any battle,
I have but one reason to draw my fatal blade
And to throw all caution, all fear of death to the winds

The reason is you, my lady

While valiant warriors and loyal vassals pledge their lives
To lords most kind and most cruel
I pledge my being to no one but you, my beloved

It is the silken touch of your gentle hand
It is the world that I see when your eyes meet mine
And it is the strength with which you hold me in your loving embrace

These are the ties that bind me to you
But these bonds feel not like the coldness of chains
Or like the coarseness of ropes, but like the cradle's warmth.

For all that I am willing to do, I only have one request.
Answer me with all your heart and tell me
Will you, my dearest

Let me be your knight in invisible armour?
This is an updated version of an old poem, written in the summer of 2009.

I wrote my first love poem, The Radiance of Love around May 2009 and had it published in my school's literary magazine. It can be found in my gallery here:

fav.me/d1utw75

After that, I read a fan-poem by the wonderful :icondark-angel-moonlight: which can also be found in her gallery and it inspired me to write this poem.

fav.me/d12tfcr

If you like her poem, be sure to check out her webcomic on this link. It's really awesome:

www.evernightcomic.com

Not only that but she was gracious enough to offer some feedback on the original poem and pointed out one flaw that seemed to nag at me for such a long time that I edited it twice.

And now, I present the newer version and I hope it flows better and is better than the last one.

The preview image is a public domain poster from this website:

karenswhimsy.com/medieval-age.…

EDIT: (15/4/2015)

One of the other lines was changed, sounds closer to the original line.
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SueJOwen Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2015  Professional Writer
I'd say you've learned a bit more about the subject. Well crafted.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:iconthankyouheartsplz: and thank you for the fave!
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pierro-studio Featured By Owner Edited Nov 23, 2014  Student Writer
Pourtant, je lis très peu de poésie en anglais, mais là...Clap 
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconmerciplz:! C'est vraiment sympa. 
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pierro-studio Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014  Student Writer
 Youre Welcome Llama Signs (Dsl, je l'ai pas trouvé en français)
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, ouais, on a oublié cela! :lol:  
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pierro-studio Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2014  Student Writer
Ouais, on est les gros froggies qui comment en français sur un poème en anglais, maison s'en fout royalementSunglasses are good 
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ouais, haha ;p
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pierro-studio Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2014  Student Writer
Headbang! 
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ArwynandCole Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
AAhhh!  YESYESYES!  Love this!  You pulled me in with just the title, sucker for romantic love that I am, but the poem was excellent!
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconthankyouflowerplz: I'm so happy you liked it!
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ArwynandCole Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It was hard not to do so!  I've got this thing about handsome knights...;) (Wink) 
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Don't we all? :giggle:
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000SkyArrow000 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WoW.....I really loved that poem ....so pretty...and talking about imaginary knights and lovely ladies made all more sweet and tender...
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm really pleased to hear that :thanks:
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000SkyArrow000 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome....and I liked a lot that poem you did ....so you deserved each words in my comment....^^
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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Love this piece! :aww: It's so well-written.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:thanks: I appreciate that!
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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Student General Artist
No problem! :floating:
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Who said chivalry is dead? ^^ The last line, especially...that seems to be how it is for most knights these days, sadly.  But it shouldn't be.  :rose:

A superb job well done! :clap:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like to think it still has a following :blush:

Thanks so much for your input :thanks: :rose:
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It does, definitely.  At least, to me it does. :)

You're welcome. :heart:
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NikkiNoonarr Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
It flows beautifully. Very romantic, I love the use of language to evoke the feeling of pure love. It's stunning.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, really! And thank you for the :+fav: :heart:
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NikkiNoonarr Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
Your welcome ^.^
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WhiteRoses13 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! This poem was wonderful! Very rarely do I read things that honor their title, for titles often mislead from the content with contemporary writers. But you have done a wonderful job and just simply captured the essence of your subject; you said what your reader wanted to read and it was beautiful! Thank you ! Well done.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, wow, thank you so much :thanks:

It really means a lot to me :heart:
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pascal-prevost Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Tu as vraiment une belle écriture :heart:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Merci infiniment :thanks:
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pascal-prevost Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Avec plaisir :)
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Graphix-Goddess Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Awwww... nicely written! It's not everyday you find beautiful love poetry written by men (in this day and age) and it's quite a breath of fresh air to see that it still lives! Thank you for sharing this lovely piece with us. ^__^ :heart:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: You have truly made my night. :iconthankyouflowerplz:
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Graphix-Goddess Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Professional Writer
:blush: you are welcome, dear. Keep it up as rarities like these are hard to come by. :love:
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WushuKhanKu96 Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I love poems with visual imagery and gripping stories, and this poem certainly fits the description, well done. I am working hard to be a good poet, though I mostly write romantic poems. I might publish a book of poems one day ^_^ I will certainly check out the sources that mentioned in the description, it seems interesting ^_^
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I really appreciate the feedback. :iconthxfavplz: as well.

I wish you the best with your poetry, too. You're doing well!
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WushuKhanKu96 Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I appreciate your support, thank you!
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :iconbowplz:
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WushuKhanKu96 Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
^//^
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