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Though I lived in one land for many years, I wandered very far
I walked alone in a world of my own making
And I secretly longed for someone to breach the walls of my desolate mind's fortress

While mere mortals may dream of conquest of every kind through any battle,
I have but one reason to draw my fatal blade
And to throw all caution, all fear of death to the winds

The reason is you, my lady

While valiant warriors and loyal vassals pledge their lives
To lords most kind and most cruel
I pledge my being to no one but you, my beloved

It is the silken touch of your gentle hand
It is the world that I see when your eyes meet mine
And it is the strength with which you hold me in your loving embrace

These are the ties that bind me to you
But these bonds feel not like the coldness of chains
Or like the coarseness of ropes, but like the water of the purest oasis.

For all that I am willing to do, I only have one request.
Answer me with all your heart and tell me
Will you, my dearest

Let me be your knight in invisible armour?
This is an updated version of an old poem, written in the summer of 2009.

I wrote my first love poem, The Radiance of Love around May 2009 and had it published in my school's literary magazine. It can be found in my gallery here:

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After that, I read a fan-poem by the wonderful :icondark-angel-moonlight: which can also be found in her gallery and it inspired me to write this poem.

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If you like her poem, be sure to check out her webcomic on this link. It's really awesome:

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Not only that but she was gracious enough to offer some feedback on the original poem and pointed out one flaw that seemed to nag at me for such a long time that I edited it twice.

And now, I present the newer version and I hope it flows better and is better than the last one.

The preview image is a public domain poster from this website:

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000SkyArrow000 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WoW.....I really loved that poem ....so pretty...and talking about imaginary knights and lovely ladies made all more sweet and tender...
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm really pleased to hear that :thanks:
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000SkyArrow000 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome....and I liked a lot that poem you did ....so you deserved each words in my comment....^^
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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Love this piece! :aww: It's so well-written.
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:thanks: I appreciate that!
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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Student General Artist
No problem! :floating:
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Who said chivalry is dead? ^^ The last line, especially...that seems to be how it is for most knights these days, sadly.  But it shouldn't be.  :rose:

A superb job well done! :clap:
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nightshade-keyblade Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like to think it still has a following :blush:

Thanks so much for your input :thanks: :rose:
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ithaswhatitisnt Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It does, definitely.  At least, to me it does. :)

You're welcome. :heart:
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NikkiNoonarr Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
It flows beautifully. Very romantic, I love the use of language to evoke the feeling of pure love. It's stunning.
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