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It starts with loss,
The family torn apart, the friends lost and the peace shattered
By the darkest hearts, the most powerful weapons and the harshest diseases
Then comes grief with its tear-stained face and its anguished cries,
Drowned out by the speed of life
It doesn't make sense.
What did we do wrong?
Why is Heaven against us?
Along came misery with its stone cold silence
Bereaved hearts long encased in an iron shell, if only to fend off
The cold gun in their hands and the ledge of the roof in front of them
If there is a Heaven waiting for us to see our loved ones,
Let our death be hastened.
But the body hesitates and the mind awakens from its slumber
Roused by a single word
No
Heaven is going nowhere, it can wait a while longer
Justice has waited too long.
First comes loss, then grief, and then despair…until all that's left is defiance.
The family torn apart, the friends lost and the peace shattered
By the darkest hearts, the most powerful weapons and the harshest diseases
Then comes grief with its tear-stained face and its anguished cries,
Drowned out by the speed of life
It doesn't make sense.
What did we do wrong?
Why is Heaven against us?
Along came misery with its stone cold silence
Bereaved hearts long encased in an iron shell, if only to fend off
The cold gun in their hands and the ledge of the roof in front of them
If there is a Heaven waiting for us to see our loved ones,
Let our death be hastened.
But the body hesitates and the mind awakens from its slumber
Roused by a single word
No
Heaven is going nowhere, it can wait a while longer
Justice has waited too long.
First comes loss, then grief, and then despair…until all that's left is defiance.
Literature
Deathbed
Panicked.
"You won't
forget
me, right?"
Literature
Lady Justice
No scream is heard with her lips sewn shut
No truth is seen because her eyes were cut
No justice is written for her hands are tied
No faith has she because her soul has died
As the world careens totally out of control
And people trade addictions for their soul
The collapse of morality becomes a torrid flood
As Lady Justice weeps tears of blood
Literature
Woman
I am woman.
Fierce and passionate.
I want it all or nothing.
I control my destiny.
I power my soul.
My love is something you will crave.
My joys are not bound to this earth.
I am limitless.
I can be everything.
Dominate character.
Hot enough to burn your soul.
My wrath will break you down.
I may speak softy but mind my words.
Beautiful even when nobody sees it.
Label me if you choose but choose your words wisely for I'm never just one thing.
Temptress.
Bitch.
Mother.
Gentle.
Friend.
Love.
Woman.
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A very quick poem that I thought of just now, composed very quickly.
I thought of a small sentence:
First comes loss...then grief...then despair...until all that's left is defiance.
From there, I started typing and couldn't stop until now. The poem is what you make of it, although I think anyone who has lost something and wants to hit back at injustice can appreciate this poem. Especially those who decide to take arms when war or armed violence has destroyed their families and lives (e.g. in Afghanistan, Libya and Syria).
I hope you enjoy it. Comments will be much appreciated!
Suggested feedback questions for
1.) Are the lines in the stanzas well organised?
2.) Without reading the description, does the poem convey its message well?
3.) Do any of the metaphors/similes/literary techniques make sense or need improvement?
4.) Any issues with formatting or other errors?
For
I have given feedback A Sunrise Scene by here: [link]
EDIT
I have added additional lines to make the poem more emotionally powerful. I'm not sure if it's helped at all. Please do let me know.
I've been told twice that my work reads like a cross between prose and poetry. How can I remedy that without compromising my style?
I thought of a small sentence:
First comes loss...then grief...then despair...until all that's left is defiance.
From there, I started typing and couldn't stop until now. The poem is what you make of it, although I think anyone who has lost something and wants to hit back at injustice can appreciate this poem. Especially those who decide to take arms when war or armed violence has destroyed their families and lives (e.g. in Afghanistan, Libya and Syria).
I hope you enjoy it. Comments will be much appreciated!
Suggested feedback questions for
1.) Are the lines in the stanzas well organised?
2.) Without reading the description, does the poem convey its message well?
3.) Do any of the metaphors/similes/literary techniques make sense or need improvement?
4.) Any issues with formatting or other errors?
For
I have given feedback A Sunrise Scene by here: [link]
EDIT
I have added additional lines to make the poem more emotionally powerful. I'm not sure if it's helped at all. Please do let me know.
I've been told twice that my work reads like a cross between prose and poetry. How can I remedy that without compromising my style?
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this is a wonderful poem
oooh questions
1. yes
2. Yes very well done
3. They are quite captivating
4. Not that I see.
good job
oooh questions
1. yes
2. Yes very well done
3. They are quite captivating
4. Not that I see.
good job